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When I grow old

I want
         a thousand
                          laugh-lines.


For when rainbows dilute and notebooks fatten
on time’s untimely passing,
when the moon falls out of kilter with a sun that
curdles in a sad, forgotten sky,
and the rain congeals inside the clouds

when the slurry of seconds sinks deep into my bones
and my skin crumples like parchment, my spine coils and splinters
and my fingers buckle, knuckle-cracking -

when my dreams fade like polaroids in sunshine
and my memories break free from their kitestrings
unanchored and drifting in such dulcet mindmurk and I watch
the world crumble from gold into grey.

I want a thousand laugh-lines
for they will be the maps to better times

so I can find my way back
Sempiternal: forever and ever

edit: A daily deviation?! WOW! I can tell you that was the last thing I expected coming on here today. I assure you I am reading every comment and noting every favourite will reply to them all! Thankyou so much for all your support!

Many thanks to :iconladylincoln: for featuring and also :iconposhlost: for suggesting this! So very very very much appreciated! <3 (:
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Given 2009-05-11
The lovely little gem sempiternal by *multicolourpirate, has much to say with its beauty and charm. ( Suggested by poshlost and Featured by LadyLincoln )
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AbstractTart Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2018
You can always find your way back if you remember the way!

What you need is Bob Monkhouse's big book of jokes.
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:iconreturn-to-energiser:
Return-To-Energiser Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2018  Hobbyist General Artist
The imagery here actually got me a bit emotional.
Incredible stuff!
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:iconjsvn:
Jsvn Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013
Wow! A very well-deserved DD... 'My fingers buckle, knuckle-cracking' is a brilliant line. wonderful
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:iconmulticolourpirate:
multicolourpirate Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2013
thank you so much! :) :hug:
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:iconnightlylies:
NightlyLies Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
this gave me that smile
that i've been waiting
forever for. :heart:
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:iconmulticolourpirate:
multicolourpirate Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2009
:hug: and your comment gave me that smile i needed too, thankyou (:
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:iconbisous-noirs:
bisous-noirs Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
I just read this again, it's beautiful ^^
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:iconbisous-noirs:
bisous-noirs Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
and again :lol: lovely.
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:iconyellowpoppyseeds:
yellowpoppyseeds Featured By Owner May 24, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
beautiful!!!!!
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:iconmulticolourpirate:
multicolourpirate Featured By Owner May 28, 2009
thankyou so much :hug:
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:iconyellowpoppyseeds:
yellowpoppyseeds Featured By Owner May 28, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
your very welcome it was beautiful and you deserve it :)
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:iconthings-i-have-loved:
things-i-have-loved Featured By Owner May 23, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
this is truly an eye opener :heart:
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:iconmulticolourpirate:
multicolourpirate Featured By Owner May 24, 2009
thankyou very much :) :hug:
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:icon1500:
1500 Featured By Owner May 19, 2009
beautiful
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:iconmulticolourpirate:
multicolourpirate Featured By Owner May 22, 2009
thankyou so much :) :hug:
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:iconawasteof-paint:
Awasteof-paint Featured By Owner May 17, 2009
I LOVE THE FIRST LINE.
this piece is talent.
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:iconmulticolourpirate:
multicolourpirate Featured By Owner May 22, 2009
Yaaaay I'm so glad you liked it! :D thankyou :hug:
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:iconawasteof-paint:
Awasteof-paint Featured By Owner May 22, 2009
youre very welcome! :D
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SisteroftheMoon Featured By Owner May 17, 2009   Writer
Wow, beautiful! And I agree with folk who say they can relate to it :)
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:iconmulticolourpirate:
multicolourpirate Featured By Owner May 17, 2009
thaaankyou! :heart: :)
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:iconfierypoplartree:
fierypoplartree Featured By Owner May 16, 2009
oh my bloody god.
that is incredibly amazing.
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:iconmulticolourpirate:
multicolourpirate Featured By Owner May 17, 2009
thankyou very much! :hug: :) <3
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:iconfierypoplartree:
fierypoplartree Featured By Owner May 17, 2009
:heart:
you're welcome.
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:iconsatah:
Satah Featured By Owner May 14, 2009
congrats on the dd! (: well-deserved. this is such a great piece.
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:iconmulticolourpirate:
multicolourpirate Featured By Owner May 15, 2009
thankyou so so much! :heart: :glomp:
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:iconnephthis:
nephthis Featured By Owner May 13, 2009
I figured I never told you completely what I thought, so I'd share it here.

This is a completely beautiful piece. It makes me want to smile and shed a tear at the same moment. It's sweet and sentimental, and definately hits that raw spot that is my heart.

Fabulous job, darling.
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:iconmulticolourpirate:
multicolourpirate Featured By Owner May 14, 2009
thankyou so so so much, that really means alot to hear <3 <3 <3
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:iconnephthis:
nephthis Featured By Owner May 14, 2009
:heart:
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:iconmilarca:
Milarca Featured By Owner May 12, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
Lovely :heart: wonderful, amazing
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:iconmulticolourpirate:
multicolourpirate Featured By Owner May 12, 2009
thankyou! :heart:
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:iconmilarca:
Milarca Featured By Owner May 13, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
no worries :)
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:iconfyrelilly:
FyreLilly Featured By Owner May 12, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I have nothing new to add. . .those before have already said it. ^^; I love it!
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:iconmulticolourpirate:
multicolourpirate Featured By Owner May 12, 2009
thaaankyou! :heart: :glomp:
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:iconfyrelilly:
FyreLilly Featured By Owner May 12, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You are most welcome! :hug:
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:iconrottenpeeches:
rottenpeeches Featured By Owner May 12, 2009
Gorgeous. :cuddle:
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:iconmulticolourpirate:
multicolourpirate Featured By Owner May 12, 2009
:glomp: thankyou! <3
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:iconcherryredroses:
CherryRedRoses Featured By Owner May 12, 2009
This is awesome!! Well done. It is so beautiful :heart:
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:iconmulticolourpirate:
multicolourpirate Featured By Owner May 12, 2009
thankyou so much! <3 <3 <3
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:iconnighthauntachika:
NightHauntaChika Featured By Owner May 12, 2009
great imagery and concept!!!!
totally deserves the dd
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:iconmulticolourpirate:
multicolourpirate Featured By Owner May 12, 2009
Thankyou! :D :D :D :heart:
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:iconfourdaysofdeath:
fourdaysofdeath Featured By Owner May 11, 2009
Absolutely wonderful. <33333 I don't think I'll ever tire of reading this poem.

Thank you for your creation~ :heart:
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:iconmulticolourpirate:
multicolourpirate Featured By Owner May 12, 2009
thankyou very much! that means a lot to me :heart: :hug:
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Admantina Featured By Owner May 11, 2009
This really is just.. great. Nothing more to be said. Fantastic work. You fully deserve the DD. Congratulations. :iconninjaglompplz:
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:iconmulticolourpirate:
multicolourpirate Featured By Owner May 12, 2009
ahhh thankyou so much! <3
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dustyreader Featured By Owner May 11, 2009
Wonderful imagery, and the idea of laugh lines being maps... That was just genius.

Congrats on the DD!
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:iconmulticolourpirate:
multicolourpirate Featured By Owner May 12, 2009
thanks so very much!! :heart: :hug:
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:icondustyreader:
dustyreader Featured By Owner May 12, 2009
You're welcome! :heart:
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:iconincognitomestizo:
incognitomestizo Featured By Owner May 11, 2009
We really outta' do something about those polariods... It's obviously a clever scheme to get us to buy more.

On the subject of your poetry, very descriptive, and wonderfully done. Keep up the good work!
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:iconmulticolourpirate:
multicolourpirate Featured By Owner May 12, 2009
Tell me about it, and the fact that they're not making them any more is probably just a publicity stunt so we fork out more money for them!

Though I love polaroids an awful lot.

and thankyou very much! :heart: :glomp:
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